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due South, fanfic, "What the Head Said."

  • Apr. 4th, 2013 at 10:47 AM
Challenge: Not what it looks like
Fandom: due South
Characters: Ray Vecchio
Title: What the head said
Summary: Ray sees behind the glamour of Vegas
Words: 235

Rating: T (implications of violence, murder.)

Summary: Vegas isn't everything it seems. Neither is Ray, anymore.




This isn’t what it looks like.

Paradise, it’s golden, and it shines;
like diamonds in the air glittering,
the chandeliers of ice spin out as stars
and swim through the shadows of the ceiling.

The table cloths are made of silk,
the food’s too beautiful to eat, and –

“Anyone we know?” says your dining companion
and laughs, tucking into the cotoletta.


This isn’t what it looks like.

Last night you dreamt the Strip,
just that, a strip through the desert -
a high street in an Old Western.
Sheets of plywood, painted at the front,
the face propped up
to look like buildings.
And the cameras rolled – lights – action.
The hookers in the upstairs windows
were standing on ladders
their sensible pants and shoes
hidden on the other side.
When they took five
they pulled on their jackets,
to cover up their nakedness,
clambered down the steps,
and walked around back stage
laughing and bumming cigarettes.

This isn’t what it looks like.

On Thursday night, you break a man’s fingers.

This isn’t what it looks like.

On Friday you’re carrying a bag.
It’s a bowling bag, you tell yourself.
You throw the bowling ball down the shaft
and the bats fly out.

All the long drop down
The head says:

“Thud.
            Thud.
Thud.”


This isn’t what it looks like.
It isn’t what it looks like.
This isn’t what it looks like, at all.

Comments

desireearmfeldt: (Ellen & Geoffrey with Feet)
[personal profile] desireearmfeldt wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 12:30 pm (UTC)
I like this one a lot. Very concrete and vivid and black-humor-ish.
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 12:35 pm (UTC)
Ha! Glad you got the black humour. My favourite bit was the dream - the hookers dressed sensibly from the waist down.

I also wouldn't want to eat anything at that particular restaurant.
[identity profile] vickitub.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 12:48 pm (UTC)
Very good, it really tells how empty Vegas made him feel, you made me feel it .
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 12:49 pm (UTC)
And you've been to Vegas! And enjoyed it - I'm sure the place isn't as bad as I paint it. :D
[identity profile] vickitub.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 01:09 pm (UTC)
The new strip no isn't that bad, its up where the old strip is that is a darker side up by the county jail.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 03:07 pm (UTC)
You're working a dark glamour here. *shudders+
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 03:14 pm (UTC)
Thank you. Or maybe Vegas is working a dark glamour on me.

Hey, could someone else live with these guys in their head for a while? Bookman is clearly driving me crazy.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 4th, 2013 03:25 pm (UTC)
Doesn't it sometimes feel like we are slaves to what the voices tell us to write?
luzula: a Luzula pilosa, or hairy wood-rush (Default)
[personal profile] luzula wrote:
Apr. 11th, 2013 09:18 am (UTC)
Ooh, that does paint a dark picture. *shivers*
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 11th, 2013 09:37 am (UTC)
I actually dreamt that strip from the movie set - I have it bad. I've had several Vegas related dreams now.
[identity profile] spuffyduds.livejournal.com wrote:
Apr. 15th, 2013 01:58 am (UTC)
Good god, this is gorgeous and funny/creepy and haunting.

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