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author: bghost
fandom: due South
character: Benton Fraser, Ray Kowalski
word count:300

AN # 1 : A treble drabble. Fraser spinning round the secrets in his head. Poetry.

AN # 2 : A [livejournal.com profile] bghost and [livejournal.com profile] ride_4ever  collaboration, written by [livejournal.com profile] bghost  as a companion piece to [livejournal.com profile] ride_4ever's Make Bright Your Dark Story , both of which having been written for the fan_flashworks "Secrets Challenge".

 




I’m a storyteller.

I make you laugh.

Fireside tales,

Inuit legend

The provenance

Of poker.

 

I’m a poet,

A liar,

A fictioneer.

I only hear

What I want to hear

Only say what I want to say.

No, don’t blame her.

I’m the liar.

 

In the fading light

Our fire burns low

To the rustle of

Your murmuring,

You, dear innocence,

Are deep drowned down

In slumber

That I can’t follow...

 

As for me,

I creep, mutter, peek,

Trying to imagine your dreams.

Ashamed to listen,

Appalled, compelled...

Naive, but never blameless,

I listen anyway.

I can’t make out

Your words.

 

I wonder what secrets

Track you there.

 

Tell me a secret,

I want to beg you.

It doesn’t even have to be true.

I need to hear your voice

In the dark,

When the fire goes out,

Someone to make me believe

For a moment

That I’m not alone

In the woods.

 

Lie to me, my good friend,

Tell me that you love me.

Anything, everything.

I just need someone

To be held by,

Someone to hold,

Somebody to give a damn

And catch me

When I fall

(I’m always falling.)

 

And, oh God knows...

I’m easy to deceive.

This far from my kingdom.

The signs point the wrong way

And the compass trembles

Unable to find

True North.

 

Perhaps in the morning,

You’ll ask for a story,

And I’ll dress this one up,

Parade it before you.

You’re no fool,

You’ll know it’s a lie.

 

And I?

I’ll try to tell you my secrets

Symbologically speaking,

With giants, and

Sprinkles and lichen

On top.

 

You’ll know, of course,

That I’m a liar,

Because I’ll talk too much.

And you’ll look me in the eyes,

As I make you laugh,

Not once deceived,

And say,

‘That’s one dark story.’

Comments

[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 01:12 am (UTC)
"Fire burned low...alone in the woods...always falling...far from my kingdom...signs point the wrong way...one dark story."

What's that chest pain ride is feeling...oh...yeah...bg's got our boys tearing at my heartstrings.

*goes off trembling to write companion piece to this poem for challenge 23*

[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 01:20 am (UTC)
Oh Ride! They do claw at the heart strings, don't they? And now I'm all excited because I can't wait to see what you write!
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 01:29 am (UTC)
And squeeing for your writing this in triple-drabble form! I love extended uses of structured forms. (Don't know yet if the companion piece will be structured or freeform. I just write what the voices tell me.)
china_shop: Admin Frannie in her civilian aide uniform (Frannie admin)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 02:58 am (UTC)
Heya, please can you keep your subject lines in the format "[fandom]: [medium]: [title]" -- it makes tagging and bookmarking easier for us. Thanks! :-)
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 11:50 am (UTC)
I will do... in fact, I was just trying to edit it for you, but LJ keeps messing it up. (I've had very bad luck with editing my stories recently.) This being the case is it okay to leave this one as it stands, and try to do better next time? I promise, at some point this year, I will get it right!
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Elaine amused)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 08:50 pm (UTC)
Yep, that's fine.
[identity profile] vickitub.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 06:51 am (UTC)
That was wonderful, it really showed the balance between them and how much they know each other and care for each other. Truly excellent work BG x
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 12:04 pm (UTC)
I think it shows how much Fraser is hurting, and hoping and fearful. He doesn't think (yet) that he deserves to be loved, but he knows that he needs to be. And yes, Ray definitely knows him, even pre slash, enough to see right through the moonshine and get that it's a dark story Fraser's telling. That's very much a theme of the series, I think... the telling of tales.
[identity profile] love-jackianto.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 12th, 2012 02:33 pm (UTC)
OH, that was wonderful!
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[personal profile] desireearmfeldt wrote:
Sep. 16th, 2012 03:30 pm (UTC)
I like the combination of Fraser's wry self-knowledge and even self-mockery ("I'm a poet/a liar/a fictioneer,"symbologically speaking/with giants/and sprinkles and lichen on top"), with his guilt and self-condemnation and vulnerability ("naive but never blameless," "And oh, God knows.../I'm easy to deceive/this far from my kingdom," "No, don't blame her/I'm the liar"). And the fact that he sees hope of both connection and...redemption? a way out & forward, anyway...from Ray.
luzula: a Luzula pilosa, or hairy wood-rush (Default)
[personal profile] luzula wrote:
Sep. 21st, 2012 02:27 pm (UTC)
Oh, I love this! I'm a sucker for allitteration, so I enjoyed this bit, for example:

You, dear innocence,
Are deep drowned down
In slumber
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Sep. 21st, 2012 02:34 pm (UTC)
I'm glad you noticed it! Sometimes when I write I get a momet when I think, 'am I taking too much trouble? Is anyone going to notice that?' So when someone spots something I laboured over it makes me feel much happier, and more appreciated. Thank you.

Have you spotted Ride's companion to this yet? She has a great Ray voice.
luzula: a Luzula pilosa, or hairy wood-rush (Default)
[personal profile] luzula wrote:
Sep. 21st, 2012 03:48 pm (UTC)
Yeah, I know that feeling! And yes, I have the companion piece open in another tab. : )

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