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Title : One Last Train Ride and It's Done Over
Fandom : due South
Characters : Ray Vecchio, Victoria Metcalf
Rating : Teen and Up
Word Count : 474
Warning : Implications of violence and death

AN # 1 : This is a sequel to my first-ever fan_flashworks fic Train Ride to Do-Over, but can be read as a stand-alone.

AN # 2 : This is a cross-pollination with the current slashtheimage challenge (image here), and the current dS_snippets challenge (using all five current suggested prompts : banana, cashews, chocolate, potato chips, "Leave me empty on a diet of strange places").

Summary :  Ray Vecchio made a promise to Victoria Metcalf. He took a shot -- literally -- at keeping it, but he missed...and it looks like Armando Langoustini who gets the do-over.

Being undercover leaves you feeling empty on a diet of this strange place, Las Vegas. Now you are the "Bookman," Armando Langoustini, and much of what is criminal in Vegas is within your purview...so when Victoria Metcalf arrives here, you know about it almost immediately. When you were Detective Ray Vecchio, you made a promise to her, and now the time for keeping that promise looks to be here.

In her hotel room, everything gleams with the desert light that comes through the floor-to-ceiling windows. She could hardly be further from the ice and isolation of Fortitude Pass in the Yukon, from what was begun there which has led her here.

You send three of your guys to subdue her; you don't underestimate how fierce and how tricky she is. "Tricky Vicky," you think, and laugh mirthlessly. You wait until you get the phone call : "The package is wrapped up for you, Boss." Then you go to her hotel room and you dismiss the three goons.

There are signs of the struggle that Victoria put up...a samovar and china cups have been knocked off the coffee table, a fruit bowl overturned and the fruit scattered, cashews and macadamia nuts strewn about, chocolate-covered potato chips fragmented on the floor. And there's Victoria, duct tape sealing her mouth, bound at her wrists and ankles to a chair.

You have a sudden memory -- and it's almost like thinking about someone else's life, not your own -- Armando thinking about Ray Vecchio. You have a memory of the Ray Vecchio who was partners with Fraser, and that time a thug said to you "You're a cop. You won't shoot me," and you replied "I'm not that good a cop"...and no, you didn't shoot the guy. So now the question is how good a mob guy are you...will it be Armando Langoustini or Ray Vecchio who keeps that promise to Victoria?

"Do you remember what I promised you, bitch? No, I don't need to hear your answer...and I don't want to hear anything from you ever again; your mouth is staying shut."

You pick up an apple and a banana from the scatter of food on the floor.

"If I wanted to 'send a message' with killing you, I'd put this apple in your mouth to mean you're a fuckin' temptress who led the most decent man I know into a world of sin. And I'd put this banana...oh shit, I'm explaining myself like perps do on TV shows...no more of that."

You put the apple and the banana on the coffee table. You draw your gun and aim it between Victoria's eyes. You say, "But I don't want to send a message. I just want to keep a promise. I told you : 'hurt him, and I'll kill you'..."

You pull the trigger.

Comments

desireearmfeldt: (cloak)
[personal profile] desireearmfeldt wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 12:36 am (UTC)
Nice. Short and...well, not actually sweet, but honed to the point. :) (And I like that this dark!Vecchio is not immune to talking slightly goofy *and* is self-aware enough to know it.)

Edited 2012-08-02 12:36 am (UTC)
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 01:12 am (UTC)
TYK for reading and commenting. And your positive comments mean a lot to me here because this is my first time writing RayV and I was kinda nervous with wanting this to be a "rounded" portrayal, and you are letting me know that I succeeded with bringing out both the dark and the goofy, and showing the self-awareness.
[identity profile] exbex.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 02:30 am (UTC)
This is not the first Vecchio-kills-Victoria-in-Vegas fic, but it's definitely as good, possibly better than the others I've read. You've really captured Vecchio's matter-of-factness wrapped up in loyalty and guilt, and not a single word is wasted.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 07:33 am (UTC)
TYK, exbex! Your comment made me so happy! This was my first time writing Vecchio...so really I was concerned to bring out all the feelings I intended...and you've assured me that I did. (And I've read other fic on this theme, as have you, and again a TYK...for your having compared this fic so favorably.)
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 10:38 am (UTC)
This is perfect! Well done on getting it finished... and the cross pollination works really well too. Worth all the time you took over it, and it was a great start to my day.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 08:38 pm (UTC)
TYK! You know more than anyone else about my trepidation with this piece, but when it was done I was (to quote brigantine) "darkly satisfied".
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 10:39 am (UTC)
And I should say also, echoing above comments, that the way Vecchio bleeds into Armando, and Armando into Ray is very well done. It's a difficult balance to get right, and you really manage it.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 08:41 pm (UTC)
...and it all bled into me, too...I went into some dark places for this fic, and with trepidation...but so worth it when I'm told I "got it right"....
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 09:48 pm (UTC)
One thing I definitely learned from this, an author is not always the best judge of their work! Because I remember you were very anxious about this, and really, you didn't need to be at all. This, and the 'prequel' have background and resonance that another author would have had to write pages about. One of your main gifts seems to be the art of compression and complexity in the briefest amount of words.
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 10:36 pm (UTC)
Yes, this is the same fic that taught ME that lesson : the lesson of the author not always being the best judge of their own work. (The same thing happened to me in mainstream fiction. A few months ago, my publisher, buying what I considered to be the "least" of all the works I'd submitted to them, told me they considered THAT piece to be "[my] best so far".)
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 09:49 pm (UTC)
You definitely did. I hope to read more of your Vecchio in future.
[identity profile] brigantine.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 04:13 pm (UTC)
That is... darkly satisfying. ;)
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2012 08:31 pm (UTC)
TYK, m'dear. That's a lovely assessment.
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[personal profile] luzula wrote:
Aug. 7th, 2012 10:38 am (UTC)
Oh, interesting. I like the reminder of the "I'm not that good a cop" line. Also, there seems to be a plethora of fics with this theme lately (did you read SockMarionette's?). So of course, I think I'll write something where he doesn't kill her. *g*
[identity profile] ride-4ever.livejournal.com wrote:
Aug. 7th, 2012 03:45 pm (UTC)
Yes, that "I'm not that good a cop" line...that's one of RayV's scenes that has always really stuck with me...and there are MORE levels of it I will explore in future fics.

I did see SockMarionette's fic on the same theme...she posted it a couple days after mine...and at this juncture I've had THREE other dS fic writers tell me that they are currently writing on this theme or have recently written and not yet posted on this theme. (Hmmm...makes me wonder about some kind of "Langoustini Virus" spreading through our fandom....)

I hope you DO write to that plot bunny you have of him NOT killing Victoria; if you do, it will be the first I've seen of this theme going in THAT direction.

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