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Title: Making Amends
Fandom: The Chronicles of Narnia
Rating: G
Length: 100
Author notes: Also written for Challenge #04: The Table of Doom!!! (Phase 3) @ [livejournal.com profile] writerverse. And a thank you to my beta Jessi!




He could hear them: the chatter before battle, the sound of steel hitting steel, bows being strung and orders being barked. It was a wonder none of the Narnians remembered that Edmund Pevensie was a boy. He had never fought save for a schoolyard tussle; he had never held a sword longer that he would have liked.

Gritting his teeth, he thought about the White Witch, each stroke of the whetstone making his sword sharper and more dangerous. He didn’t stop until the tip drew blood from his finger.

He was lost once. Today, he will make up for it.


Comments

[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 04:11 pm (UTC)
Liked that very much. Love that you pointed out Edmund is just a boy, and imply in so few words just how much he has grown up, and how much more he will grow. Well done.
[identity profile] mihnn.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 04:27 pm (UTC)
Thank you. I'm fascinated by Edmund and his character growth. Glad you liked it. :)
[identity profile] bghost.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 04:42 pm (UTC)
I like the fact that, if you were to describe everything you've compressed into these few words, you'd end up writing considerably more than the actual piece itself! It's so crystalised it's practically poetry.
[identity profile] mihnn.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 05:19 pm (UTC)
What a compliment! Thank you! I guess, sometimes, 100 words can be enough. :)
thisbluespirit: (LOTR - once upon a time)
[personal profile] thisbluespirit wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 04:22 pm (UTC)
Yes, I agree with the above comment. This is excellent. :-)
[identity profile] mihnn.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 13th, 2012 04:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you :)
[identity profile] mergatrude.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2012 01:20 am (UTC)
Oh, this is excellent.
[identity profile] mihnn.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2012 01:56 am (UTC)
Thank you.
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[personal profile] elen_nare wrote:
Jun. 14th, 2012 04:48 pm (UTC)
I loved it :) I like how in so few words you manage to show how much Edmund has changed, and how determined he is to prove himself.
[identity profile] mihnn.livejournal.com wrote:
Jun. 15th, 2012 04:37 am (UTC)
Thank you. I've always felt that Edmund's insecurities and how he overcame them was interesting in the Pevensie-family dynamic :)

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