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Refusal: Poem: Original: Nonet for my Mother

Apr. 22nd, 2015 at 11:29 AM

clarasteam: Maggi Hambling Scallop (scallop voices)

Title: Nonet for my Mother
Fandom: Original
Length: 9 lines, 45 syllables
Content notes: reference to suicide
Technical note: a nonet is a form of 9 lines, beginning with a 9 syllable line and decreasing by 1 syllable each line, ending with a 1 syllable line.
Summary: Nothing to hold you back, not this time.

Nothing to hold you back, not this time,
no reason to go on living.
Not enough love in the world -
not that there ever was.
Nothing you want here:
not food, not drink.
"No," you say,
"no more.
No."

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theicescholar: coffee with a cinnamon heart (heart)

theicescholar wrote:

Apr. 22nd, 2015 04:11 pm (UTC)

Ow. There is a respect for the dying that I was not expecting. You have such a big heart.

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clarasteam wrote:

Apr. 22nd, 2015 08:21 pm (UTC)

thank you! *hugs*

I think it's possible to understand the reasons for that choice and still feel rage and grief about it.

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smallhobbit wrote:

Apr. 22nd, 2015 09:15 pm (UTC)

Beautifully crafted and conveying so much.

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clarasteam wrote:

Apr. 23rd, 2015 11:07 pm (UTC)

thank you very much - and thank you for encouraging me to experiment with more forms.

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2ndskin wrote:

Apr. 24th, 2015 12:13 pm (UTC)

I agree with thimp--what a big heart. What a precise and strong form this is--you probably couldn't have chosen a better one. Your sense of the ending of life is so different from my experiences that I found myself reading the poem four times to really digest all the meanings. So glad you wrote this.

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clarasteam wrote:

Apr. 24th, 2015 12:55 pm (UTC)

thank you sweetie! *hugs* I am glad I wrote it too.

I like this form, and it felt as if it fitted what the poem was trying to do.

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