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Bravely Default: Fanfic: Smooth Talker

  • Mar. 10th, 2014 at 6:26 PM
Title: Smooth Talker
Fandom: Bravely Default: Where the Fairy Flies
Characters: Alternis Dim, Lee family
Rating: PG/SFW
Length: 484 words
Content Notes: Spoilers for chapter 4's end!
Summary: Women and men have different ways of talking, and Alternis grew up in a country of women. Adjusting to Eternia comes with a small hitch.

Women and men have different ways of talking, at least in Eternia. This makes the new arrival from Florem stick out like a sore thumb: he is a young man grown in a country of women, and as much as he takes great offense when his manhood is called into doubt, there's no denying that his manner of speaking makes him sound more like the women he learned to speak from. Mahzer is no linguist, so she's not quite able to put her finger on all that makes his words stand out as different from the men's--the higher intonation is obvious enough, but there's more, little things beyond that. The Florem flourish sounds different in a boy's voice, but it's definitely present. When he is patient and in a good mood, which is usually when he is found with little Edea, the little questions stand out: "Right?", "You follow?", always making sure the younger child is keeping up with him when she's not tearing along her own line of thought. It's perhaps a bit strange to hear a young man talk in such a way, but his voice is clear and sweet enough to make it rather becoming.

But he is a young man entering Eternia's army, and Mahzer knows all too well how certain officers, Crowe and Heinkel in particular, feel about women and femininity. Their attitudes infect the ranks and it's all too often that Alternis is in a sour and recalcitrant mood, mocked when he speaks for how he does and mocked when he bites his tongue, and Braev is soon sighing that the only solution the boy seems to have found is to speak with his fists--which is, at least, a step up from his blade, but still not good for keeping order in the ranks. It's easier for one to change than a multitude, so it's no surprise that after some weeks Alternis is deliberately pitching his voice deeper and rougher, and the rolling tones of his motherland begin to vanish. It's a somewhat regrettable change, but as the weeks turn into months and months turn into years, it's all but forgotten by the Lee family. Braev, Mahzer and Edea have all grown used to the clipped tones Alternis has come to use and can hardly imagine him speaking any other way. The memory of how Alternis was when he first arrived into their lives only comes to Mahzer's mind when she is face to face with Edea and her daughter's new friends. She asks them to take care of her daughter and one young man assures her, with a bow even, that he would never do anything but. While his words alone would make her happy, his voice broadens her smile further. He's only got a hint of it, but he has it, that novel Florem flourish. It goes perfectly with his charming manner.

Comments

sanctum_c: (Default)
[personal profile] sanctum_c wrote:
Mar. 11th, 2014 08:29 am (UTC)
I like the details here; especially the idea that the most sexist characters in the ranks aren't going to be respectful of Alternis's speech patterns/influence those under their command serving to isolate him. And how that feeds into changing that pattern deliberately which contributes to the lack of recognition later when the Lee family meet Ringabel (did Alternis basically never remove his armour after a while?).

Edited 2014-03-11 08:30 am (UTC)
raaj: [ff7] cloud & aerith on the gondola (Default)
[personal profile] raaj wrote:
Mar. 11th, 2014 12:51 pm (UTC)
/rambles
AHAHA well the thing is the writers themselves apparently never figured out why Edea doesn't recognize Ringabel's face (this is that thing I was talking about when I said the writers had gotten a little lazy. I felt like flipping a table the first time I read the end of the interview). Buut yeah that's basically the theory I'm going with: both that a part of Alternis' mannerisms were deliberate for fitting into Eternia, so once he forgot who he was he lost his whole reason to act in those ways and became more unrecognizable, and that the Lee family finds him hard to recognize outside the armor since he rarely took it off. I actually headcanon that since it's implied he had the dark knight asterisk before Braev found him, his armor pretty much is his face in Eternia; he'd become so used to hiding himself away in Florem that he continued to do it in Eternia and after a while people let him be about that.

Mahzer and Braev actually do recognize him without being told in subsequent worlds (third and fourth iirc) though, so they must know his face at least a bit, but likely events in the first world keep them from ever making the jump to placing him as Alternis (while people pre-spoiler have liked theorizing that Ringabel slips away every night to act as Alternis, the game actually treats distance as a thing not collapsible into two/three hours-- Mahzer and Braev are being given regular updates by Alternis which means his location itself is regularly known, so even if they see a young man who somehow reminds them of him, they're not going to think "ALTERNIS???" because they know what Alternis has been up to, there's no way he could be the fourth member of Edea's group). Edea was younger when his face was more frequently seen so she simply doesn't remember well enough, and Ringabel acts so differently that that's a huge mislead in itself. ...Honestly the most glaring plothole I think actually stands from Alternis' infiltration of Caldisla under Heinkel's suggestion, as we're outright told that Heinkel deliberately got Alternis drunk to make him more amenable to the idea. They were drinking and eating, he probably wasn't wearing the helmet then! Then Heinkel encounters Ringabel backing up Edea turning traitor--and he KNOWS Alternis would be liable to protect Edea, that's specifically what he used to appeal to Alternis for his idea. Add in the little note that Heinkel has always had some interest in Alternis and seemed to find him a promising young knight and he really should have both recognized Ringabel (having recently seen his face) and had some sort of reaction, even if it was just utter bafflement because he finds it hard to believe Alternis himself has turned traitor. There's nothing in that scene. \o_O/

Edited 2014-03-11 12:53 pm (UTC)
sanctum_c: (Default)
[personal profile] sanctum_c wrote:
Mar. 11th, 2014 08:30 pm (UTC)
Re: /rambles
Ah! I was going to ask what you'd meant about the writers getting lazy, but somehow I forgot. That was a little worrying to read; some of it at least reads like they've got some ideas for later in the series, but too many of those responses were we never considered that. Right with you on the table-flipping. I *really* hope they do better with Bravely Second (there is an interview somewhere where the producers mentioned concentrating more on the story this time). Anyway.

Ringabel reverting to his original accent and behaviors is a very attractive theory, and in light of what there is to work with having Alternis never remove the armor in public seems the most workable solution (making me think of Judge Dredd...). Oh; could the Dark Knight asterisk be some kind of family heirloom that he wound up with? I like the idea he already had it which helps with preventing him being recognised. And... I'm never quite sure, but I do wonder if there are really only one copy of each asterisk in the world (quite likely since Yulyana is the only one capable of making them - still wishing that was gone into a little more).

Ah, true Braev and Mahzer recognize him regardless later on. I think I ran into some people theorizing that Alternis and Ringabel were the same person at the same time just yesterday. Its kind of an interesting theory, but yeah invalidated by the game and distances (it did impress me when there was a later party chat about how long they were sailing on the Eschalot)..

Ah - I think I need to read D's journal more thoroughly as I didn't know about that little bit about the infiltration. Yeah that whole note just causes no end of problems (though now I have silly visions of Alternis drinking via a really long straw that disappears into his helmet...). Dammit writers! Its as if Alternis/Ringabel was a late on decision and they didn't correct for it in the preceding story, or at the very best the D's journal entry was written really early and left unchanged.
raaj: [ff7] cloud & aerith on the gondola (Default)
[personal profile] raaj wrote:
Mar. 11th, 2014 11:39 pm (UTC)
Re: /rambles
Ahaha, yeah I also saw the story comment about Bravely Second and was like "oh PLEASE let them do that". Because it does seem like they had interesting ideas for this game but kind of...forgot to make sure everything meshed together. Leaving plotholes of which some CAN be covered up and others... well...I'm still looking for the tarp that'll fit.

Given that Alternis was abandoned by his mother I never really thought his asterisk would be an heirloom (kind of "if she cares enough about him to give him something so rare, why is she abandoning him in the first place?" There ARE possible explanations, it's just not what first jumps to mind). I've kind of been imagining the Dark Knight asterisk as something of a legend in the slums of Florem, passed around from user to user by theft, murder, betrayal... lovely things like that, and Alternis would have either gotten it from the last person because they were already dying/dead, or it'd be much Agnes and Tiz getting the white mage/monk actually: he was attacked by the asterisk-holder and just narrowly managed to kill them with a bit of wits, instinct and a ton of luck.

Ah, was the Eschalot chat the one where Ringabel had scolded Agnes for not eating what Tiz caught when they ran out of other provisions? I adored that one.

The whole story of why Dim was in Caldisla is way more apparent in the full journal, but yeah, it's an interesting read! If a tiny bit frustrating...
sanctum_c: (Default)
[personal profile] sanctum_c wrote:
Mar. 12th, 2014 12:05 am (UTC)
Re: /rambles
I would bet that the stretched feeling of chapters 5 to 8 also result out of interesting ideas but forgetting to mesh them (especially as it sounds like in the original version the sub-quests were unchanged. So glad they changed that as those changes were what made it worth keep returning to them. Especially after Holly and Barras fake their death and she pounces him). Hopefully there is a sufficient amount of head-canon to cover the plot holes... (and Bravely Second requires a lot less...)

Ah; along with not having read D's journal very thoroughly, I'd forgotten about the abandonment, so yeah the heirloom doesn't make much sense. The legend of the slums one is interesting, I think in keeping with the game's mechanics I like the idea that he was attacked by the asterisk holder and managed to defeat them through wits, instinct and luck.

Yes! That's the chat in question.

I will read the journal more thoroughly; been skimming through the event viewer for detail for some fic ideas for the new prompt (it kind of feels tailor-made for Bravely Default)...
raaj: (kittens)
[personal profile] raaj wrote:
Mar. 12th, 2014 05:32 pm (UTC)
Re: /rambles
Haha, yeah, if the subquests really were unchanged through chapters 5 and 8 I'm honestly a bit surprised people liked it well enough for it to be getting a sequel--I would have given up!

And "Revision" does sound like it has possibilities with the Groundhog's Day loop--that, or perhaps tidying up a nagging plothole >_> haha.
sanctum_c: (Default)
[personal profile] sanctum_c wrote:
Mar. 12th, 2014 08:44 pm (UTC)
Re: /rambles
Haha - so would I! Or at least started skipping the side-quests as much as possible, and yeah it is a little remarkable it did well enough for it to gain the re-release with some fixes in place.

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