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Original: poetry: Soluble

  • Aug. 1st, 2021 at 10:32 AM
Title: Soluble
Fandom: none
Rating: G
Summary: Wellington winter


Soluble

Wellington winter, the forecast
overly optimistic it seems. I eye
clouds heavy as a weighted blanket
and unlock my bike. I didn't bring over-trousers
and my windcheater is literally coming apart at the seams

which is fine, whatever, my clothes aren't tissue paper,
skin will dry. What matters is the rain cover for my pannier
and that only for the notebook nestled amid pens, hand sanitiser, earphones, & misc. No, not even the notebook—
its last dozen pages, used, sandwiched between the rest and cardboard covers. Layers wrap layers

wrap layers wrap notes caught
in my spider-web writing: fannish meta, to-do lists, reminders to self and the dashed phrases
and sketched-out signposts that, with time and attention, might lead me into fic.

Comments

tabaqui: (Default)
[personal profile] tabaqui wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 12:51 am (UTC)
Oh, that was neat. I like that.
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 05:27 am (UTC)
Thanks! :-D
adafrog: (Default)
[personal profile] adafrog wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 03:15 am (UTC)
Good.
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 05:28 am (UTC)
Thanks! :-)
luzula: a Luzula pilosa, or hairy wood-rush (Default)
[personal profile] luzula wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 08:35 am (UTC)
Aww! I like how you go from the outer everyday life to the inner fannish life.
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 10:33 am (UTC)
Thank you! *beams*
lunabee34: (Default)
[personal profile] lunabee34 wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 11:15 am (UTC)
I love your use of enjambment and the way that enjambment has different effects. So in the first stanza, that last line continuing is a bit of unraveling, the stanza a bit coming apart at the seams. And then in the third, that lack of punctuation lets the third stanza layer and wrap into the fourth--form following function.

Nicely done.
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 10:31 pm (UTC)
Thaaaank you! <3333

(I'm doing it all mostly by instinct. I love how smart you make me sound. *g*)
lunabee34: (Default)
[personal profile] lunabee34 wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2021 10:02 am (UTC)
You're doing that all by yourself. :)
hhimring: Estel, inscription by D. Salo (Default)
[personal profile] hhimring wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 12:57 pm (UTC)
I like your use of the theme of wrapping and unwrapping. Very neat!
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 1st, 2021 10:32 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! :-D
lferion: Art of pink gillyflower on green background (Default)
[personal profile] lferion wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2021 03:55 am (UTC)
Very neat! I like how much movement it has, a continuous underlying thread of hurry, anticipating, hunching under the rain.
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2021 04:22 am (UTC)
*beams* Thanks so much, you!
mergatrude: (writing - poetry)
[personal profile] mergatrude wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2021 06:50 am (UTC)
♥ ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥
china_shop: Close-up of Zhao Yunlan grinning (Default)
[personal profile] china_shop wrote:
Aug. 2nd, 2021 07:34 am (UTC)
<3 <3 <3 <3 <3

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